How to deal with the stress in our life（怎样解决生活中的压力）这是一篇建议类型的作文，这样的作文类型非常好写，在平时的写作中，我们让学生按照总分总的写法来构思，而且在陈述自己的建议时，要用到First,…Second,…Third,…Finally来分述自己的观点。从批改孩子们的作文中，我惊喜地发现他们都掌握了这样的写作格式，而且开头很有创新，这是值得肯定的方面。但是，在书写表达的过程中他们却依然逃不出语法，词汇等错误的怪圈，走不出语言重复，苍白的路径。

开头——不拘泥

按照平时的格式，其实这篇作文的开头可以用最简单的方法——把题目抄写下来作为开头，然后加上过渡句就可以。如How to deal with the stress in our life？Here is my advice.在批改的过程中，我发现孩子们的作文并没有走捷径，而是用自己的方式绽放不同的色彩。

李天雨同学;Now many children have much stress in their life .(添加了总领句) How to deal with the stress in our life？Here is my advice.

孔令仁同学：As we know,stress is a part of life.Different

people have different ideas about stress. How to deal with the stress in our life？Here is my advice.(用压力是生活的一部分来开头，立意独特)

张文嫣同学：More and more students have stress in our life.But most of them don’t know how to deal with it .Here is some advice for them.(由不知道如何去做引出自己的观点，过渡自然流畅)

崔吉祥同学：Children may have too much stress in everyday life.It’s bad for our health.We should learn to deal with the stress.Here is my advice.(把开头的疑问句变成了陈述句来开头，语气显得诚恳有说服力)

不足之处：

1. Now many children have much stress in they life .(改为their)

Different

2. people have different idears about stress.(最常见的错误拼写，应为ideas)

3. Here is my some advice.(这里面的my和some重复使用)

4. Now many children have many stress in their life .( stress是可数名词也是不可数名词，如果用many 应该改为stresses)

分述——有思想

思想一——学会求助。如：1.First，we can talk with our parents or teachers about it。2. First，when we have stress ,we should ask our parents for help .3.It’s very necessary for us to talk about it with our parents.

思想二——学会减压。如1.You can listen to music or do some sports to relax yourself.2.You can take part in some sports,such as playing basketball,swimming,recycling and so on .3.You can have a walk after dinner .4.You must have a good sleep 5.If yoeu feel bad ,you must see a doctor.

思想三——会热爱。如1.You should keep happy and smile to the life.2.If you smile to the life,the life will smile to you.3.No matter what kind of life we have,smile to it.We are sure to have a bright day every day .

总结——很干练

我们要求写作文的时候前呼后应，孩子们对这一点把握的非常好。结尾句：1.If you follow my advice ,I’m sure you will have less stress.2. If you follow these suggestions ,you will be happy again.3. If you follow my advice ,you will deal with the stress well.4.You will feel relaxed if you can follow my suggestions.

我们在批改学生的作文时，要以欣赏的姿态来发现捕捉其中的闪光点，哪怕只是一点荧光，我们都要学着去放大。星星之火可以燎原，对于孩子们来说，这一点光或许不足以驱赶他们对作文的恐惧，但是却足以点燃他们对写作的热情。